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She's at a crossroad again.

If she recalled correctly, then this was the fourth time in her entire life. She tentatively places a foot forward, on to the cool glass. Decisions were never my strong point, she thinks. Knowing that this could take anywhere between an hour to a few days, she takes off the bulky coat, spreading it out before taking a seat in the middle of the cross-section. There weren't going to be any passer-bys after all.

Wait. I've...I've never looked back.

The thought crosses her mind for less than a second, but it clutches onto the messy vines inside her head and before she can stop herself, she's turning her head around looking over her shoulder and gazing into the mist-filled street. It's murky, grey, dark, and filled with heavy rain.

Why have I never looked back?

She doesn't know if that's really a question, or if it's something she's asking herself, but she definitely finds the confusion that comes with the thought loathsome, at best. Deciding not to wait for another epiphany, she gets up. Reaching the wall of silvery wisps, she slowly watches the ripples her fingers are creating in the surface. It doesn't let her through.

She can't fight it. The defeat spreads through her skin, and before she realises, she's shivering and walking backwards and away from the street.

Still trembling, she senses the water on her cheeks.

Tears?

It's said with an incredulous tone as she captures one with her hand and looks down at it.

Another thought.

She knows, that this isn't going to be as quick as it always has been. After all, it's not the first time she's hesitated when taking a turn down into one of these streets.

It's the first time she's felt afraid.
If you thought this was another one of my dreams, think again. Just another doodle.

:music: Depeche Mode - Precious

EDIT:

Thank you so much for the DD, especially to :iconrovanna: (If you haven't taken a look at her gallery yet, do so! Her gallery will probably cheer you up more than you think. ;P) for suggesting it and to :icondorianharper: for featuring it, and those who favourite-d it! :love:

When I saw the little box on my deviation this morning, it took me at least half an hour of 'Ok, this isn't my deviation, or my profile that this is on, I must have clicked someone else's' and 'Maybe my browsers acting funny?' to get to the point where I thought hey! It's real! ^^;
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-12-18
Crossroads by *Entitaria is, as the suggester says, "visual when you read it ... [with a] really surreal and dreamlike atmosphere." ( Suggested by Rovanna and Featured by DorianHarper )
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amour-raven Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Student Writer
On behalf of %Authors-Club, I would like to personally congratulate you for being featured in our New Year 2014 journal. We are inspired by your words and we thank you for being such a wonderful part of the literature community both in our club and on deviantART. :hug:2 rvmp  
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for the feature and the kind words! I feel honoured to have been included with such lovely people. :love:
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amour-raven Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Student Writer
You are very welcome, m'dear! hug 
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013   Writer
I used your title for title poem here- fav.me/d705170 -thanks!
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you found it useful! :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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LelandCaldwell Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
"...clutches onto the messy vines inside her head..."

Excellent...

"The defeat spreads through her skin..."

Nice...

Favorited, following!
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the lovely comment, favourite and watch! :love:
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LelandCaldwell Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
:)

I am definitely going to read the rest of your works!


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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And I truly appreciate the sentiment, thank you! :heart:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :love: :iconallmyloveplz:
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pokemon22255 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful!
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart:
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pokemon22255 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconrovanna:
Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013   Digital Artist
Shared Excitement - NaNoEmo Day 1 
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Tackling hug :iconallmyloveplz:
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Amanda-Lara1996 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is great! I just have a quick question, how do you submit literature to DA?
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!~ :>

Ah, well, when you're at the submission page, you just press 'enter text' just under the upload button, just write whatever you'd like to submit there. (:
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Amanda-Lara1996 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok, thank you! :D
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem~ :>
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
Finally! :D Congrats on the DD! :)
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahahah~ Thank you! :love:
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:iconhelenburg:
HelenBurg Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Which way?
decisions....decisions
Great work!
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed! I faced much confusion when I tried figuring that out for myself.
Thank you~ :heart:
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IridescentCatalyst Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
Great pacing and story! Congrats on the DD! ^^
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :love:  It's a relief to hear when what you've written doesn't seem too rushed/slow. :>
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IridescentCatalyst Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013
You're welcome, and true (:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you~ :love:
And of course, the same to you! :>
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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robson666 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation  Clap
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:iconentitaria:
Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :la:
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eclectic-reception Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked this. It made me feel nervous, like the character in the story, I presume. It's very mysterious, and I am curious as to what exactly the main character is doing.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad to hear you like it! Nervousness is one of the emotions that came to mind with this and to be entirely honest, I'd like to know what she's doing too. :P
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eclectic-reception Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, so it's one of those that just comes out of nowhere, huh? Those always make me want to write an entire story based around that single fragment of an idea.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yup~ although the reason for the spur of the moment writing is always obvious for me, so, this is actually quite a personal piece. :> I know what you mean~ I'd actually started a story with the older ones, but I'm on a bit of weird hiatus at the moment.
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eclectic-reception Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It reminded me of Supernatural, where people go to the crossroads and summon demons. I thought she might be talking to demons, for some reason. It would be a very interesting story, the way I imagine it.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, I see~ I've never actually watched Supernatural, don't really know if I will yet. It probably would be! Although, I think, the emotions and thoughts I had in mind while writing this, would indicate how different the situation in this story actually is, so not much of an association with demons at the moment. :P :>
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eclectic-reception Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's a very good show. It has my endorsement. lol But what did you have in mind, if you don't mind my asking?
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahah~ I've seen enough fans around dropping hints about how amazing it is. :P I'll give it a try at some point. (:
Well, to be honest, it's feels very odd to explain, it's very much a representation of who I am as a person in way, as cliché as it might be. :P
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013   Digital Artist
I love this one! The setting is great, I feel like I can smell the fog. I'm bad at decisions too. :saddummy:
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :love:
I'm sorry to hear you are, but happy to know you understand~ Terrible isn't it? :<
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013   Digital Artist
:<
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconsweethugplz: :>
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:iconrovanna:
Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013   Digital Artist
:heart: rvmp 
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