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tell me dear,
have you ever fallen in love with a ghost?

trying to force yourself to feel was like
forcing a sundial off its axis,
shattering time was no easy feat

just like the moment you held his
glue-like affection at arms length,
and in a few moments alone
you saw a flicker in your eyes
that you'd never seen before

(there wasn't enough room
 for both fear and love)

so it was when you had reached
a crossroad so long ago
that you spared a glance back

and realised that the tape
you'd swung across
both your wrists
had torn along the way

(and you knew, that
 it had always
 belonged to the wind)
:music:Waterstrider - Twice (Little Dragon Cover)
    Dead C.A.T Bounce ft. Emily Underhill - Nothing To Say
    Feint - Atlas

I was sure about what I was thinking, not so sure about what's written here. There's a smidgen of truth in there, somewhere. Hidden so well I can barely tell what it is myself.

Was it a failure or success? Well, at least it's slightly different from the usual, I hope. :dummy:
I'm still not happy with my writing these days, it feels all jumbled, mumbled and stumbled through.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I personally loved this poem. I started reading and I couldn't stop until I reached the ending, and frankly speaking, I loved the ending as much as I loved this whole poem. I mean it. Its fluid, its well written, its heartfelt, its sincere... and its such a unique take on the title you've written. At the same time, the openness of this poem made me reminisce and ponder on what is a utopia and a dystopia... its a good concept :thumbsup: And well executed in my honest opinion. :clap: Well done!
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Entitaria Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Goodness, thank you much for the lovely praise! I honestly can't tell you how much this comment alone cheered me up. :heart: it's lovely to hear you liked it so much! :love:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) Your a good writer who does deliver. At least among the poems that you've written, I haven't found a reason not to like them.

Stay blessed.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's actually very encouraging to hear, and surprising to be honest, thank you very much, again~ :heart:

And of course, same to you~ v.v
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) :hug: Anytime.

Oh, on a more lighter note, do you like tags? :D
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Entitaria Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I assume you mean journal tags? They're fun to do, from time to time, although I've been on and off of dA for a bit now, uni work catching up with me and all. :P
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) The very same.

I tried this one random journal tag last time, which was something like an "involved" sort of story telling. It isn't something in which a person has to respond back in any way, but instead they sit back and relax and watch themselves play their role in that story.

I can send you a link if you want...
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Entitaria Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, that actually sounds interesting, and a little like something I've tried before actually, if I'm thinking along the same lines. :>

Sure! Although I make no promises about doing it myself. ^^; :P
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Majikku7 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written. I don't think its jumbled at all. :)
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Entitaria Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you~ :heart: I'm relieved to hear as much~ :>
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