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-she's petrified
of being fixed
because being broken
is all she's ever known-
I don't know...too cliche?
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh no, this is not cliche - the idea maybe slightly perhaps but the execution makes up for it. Wonderfully stated!
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :love:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :love:
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Succinct and simple, but full of meaning that makes one aware of the fragility of the heart, which leads to a state of beautiful verse. Exceptional work, well done.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, for such a lovely perspective on this piece~ :heart:
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LelandCaldwell Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Awwww.

Yeah, MisterTotality has got it right.

Don't worry yourself about cliche or not cliche; write what comes naturally.

If a lot of gals feel this way, and if that's why your concerned about the cliche monster biting you... consider this:

Why do lots of gals feel that way?

Write about that... I'd love to read your answers to the questions:

'Why do so many girls and young women feel broken?"

'Why are they petrified of being fixed?"



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Entitaria Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahah~ well, it certainly felt natural. :>

Why do girls feel broken? The situations I'm thinking of at the moment are usually because of relationships, people we've known. Some of the people on this website, the ones that come up with the most beautiful pieces of art, and including and especially so, literature, are sometimes the ones who have experienced so much, something that's made them who they are today. For some, that might mean never having healed entirely from an experience. This is all, of course, just based on a few scenarios, there are a lot of other things to consider. In my own case, I'd rather not say.

As for a fear of being fixed? I guess it might be because it's a change, a change in yourself, the person you've known for as long as you've been alive, and imagining that changing in some way, can be terrifying, especially when you've never known how anything else feels.

I'm afraid I can't actually write another piece about this, because in a way, that's what this piece means the first place. To some extent at least. XD
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LelandCaldwell Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Gotcha.

Thank you.


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MisterTotality Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
No, it's not too cliche.  It's beautiful, and I feel like I've known too many girls like this.
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Entitaria Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :heart: I'm afraid I'd have to agree, it's probably why it felt cliche.
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