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to the glass
the surface rippling
waves scattering in time
All that left her mouth was a breathy gasp
Molten
bronze and gold
staring back at her
and all she could think of was
she could
feel
her hand touching another
as distorted glass was left to drift
at the
soles
of
her
feet
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3. Equivalence"Let go."
"For the last time, let it go!" Her hands quivering, shaking, the coldness sinking into her bones.
Black wisps of smoke were rising off of her butterfly.
He refused to listen, hair, jacket, clothes, everything, fighting the force of the violent current, trying to tear his skin apart.
"No." He scowled, digging his fingers into the swords grip. "Not yet."
Her eyes widened, dragged her feet across, barely making any progress. "Damn it!" Crystalline ice-like water dropping from her eyes.
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Ink Eno Oel Ith Osev.
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Wish upon a wish, upon a wish, upon a wish,
Cascading waterfall,
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5. Dreamt EscapeHer hands dug into the ground, and began to gently slide the remaining sand off her find.
A shadow cast onto her.
"Found something?" Her colleague asked, moving her sunglasses to her hat.
"You tell me." She took a brush from her little pack, brushing away the dirt trapped in the engravings. She pushed her hand out, showing the other the small but thick tablet, an ornate silver design covered the edge, and dropped off into the corners, as if it was melting.
She took the tablet from her, carefully balancing it in her gloved hands.
"These markings..." Her eyes widened slightly, a tint of surprise in them "How, no, why are they so perfectly
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Hello, I'm Naktarra from the group 
and I'm here today to critique your work.
When will you understand that you write lovely poetry? And when will you understand that I hope you enjoy writing it as much as I enjoy reading it?
Really, with something as artistic as poetry, it can be hard to judge it. Unlike prose, there isn't a real defined form in the community. So, going off a more noble way of a review, I'll be using the general things to review a poem. Remember, poetry really is completely and utterly free to anything it wants to be. What is usually valued in it is the flow and the overall theme or meaning. the top poets are usually held high for their imagery and the feel they gave off. However, much like a painting you could paint a field of flowers or just a blue streak and it can be just as beautiful.
Suggestions/Feedback
1. Punctuation. I think either you could consider more or less in this poem. In total, you have three periods. I find it's a bit disruptive and it doesn't make it just as ascetically pleasing. I think it would be in your best interest to simply remove them from the main poem. When reading the poem, it will draw more attention to your piece of code you have on the bottom. Remember how much every bit of formatting matters, especially on something like a website where you want people to dedicate their time if the words look nice.
2. You have something I rarely actually see in the poetry on Deviantart. You have a form to your poetry that is in an image. Visually, the poetry is usually a blank white wall with dark text; I bet you could show this to someone who hardly knows the language and they'd probably think it's a darn sharp poem.
My challenge to you is to play a bit of a text game. Perhaps make a rather long poem, but put it into the shape of something physical with the words. Have fun with the format. Talk about galaxies and make a pinwheel spiral of arms of stars or have wings spreading out to a march of freedom. I think you could do something real special with it. 
Happy writing!
Naktarra